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Some job employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times even on holidays.what are the advantages and Disadvantages

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Some job managers want to be able to get in touch with their workers at all times, even on their
day
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 off. In my
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 has various drawbacks,
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negative
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 days is bad and support with examples.
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rest
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them because their alone time with family their families will be interrupted
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work
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 . Mother or father have to leave family during
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 time to devote their attention to
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 of family.In some families,
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the family will think they are deprived of love. Another problem is, the impact it can have on the individual psychological health.Lack of
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 from
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 will cause stress which can result
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 insomnia and anxiety.A
staff
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 knowing very well his
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 is
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tedious
 may consider resigning to a more flexible working environment or absenteeism , due to health issues or lack of motivation.
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,calling workers during leave off has some upper hand.In certain institutions like
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 care system,which most of the time become overwhelmed with the number of cases arriving, a boss may call in
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staff
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 to assist to care for the sick .
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 even as the
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 accepts to be on duty despite their
rest
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 days, the
staff
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 will feel fulfilled for coming in to offer assistance. In summary, when job owners call on their workers during their off days,it
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 their loved ones and
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 they become fatigued. In my opinion, employers can pay extra and recommend them for promotion when
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staff
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 is called to assist
work
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 during holidays.
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