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Some job employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times even on holidays.what are the advantages and Disadvantages

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Some job managers want to be able to get in touch with their workers at all times, even on their
day
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days
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 off. In my
opinion
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this
 has various drawbacks,
hence
 it is
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negative
.
This
 essay will talk abt why calling employers calling during
rest
 days is bad and support with examples.
First
 of all, calling
staff
 during
rest
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the rest
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 period , put stress on
the
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them because their alone time with family their families will be interrupted
with
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work
 . Mother or father have to leave family during
fun
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 time to devote their attention to
work
instead
 of family.In some families,
this
 can result in
family
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 feud
where
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whereby
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by
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the family will think they are deprived of love. Another problem is, the impact it can have on the individual psychological health.Lack of
rest
 from
work
 will cause stress which can result
to
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 insomnia and anxiety.A
staff
 knowing very well his
work
 is
tidious
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tedious
 may consider resigning to a more flexible working environment or absenteeism , due to health issues or lack of motivation.
However
,calling workers during leave off has some upper hand.In certain institutions like
health
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the health
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 care system,which most of the time become overwhelmed with the number of cases arriving, a boss may call in
a
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staff
 to assist to care for the sick .
This
 initiative is a positive impact
therefore
 even as the
staff
 accepts to be on duty despite their
rest
 days, the
staff
 will feel fulfilled for coming in to offer assistance. In summary, when job owners call on their workers during their off days,it
affect
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 their loved ones and
also
 they become fatigued. In my opinion, employers can pay extra and recommend them for promotion when
a
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staff
 is called to assist
work
 during holidays.
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