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Q. Some people think a country benefits from a large proportion of young university students, others think sending young people to universities only lead to graduate unemployment. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Education
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technology.it is believed that any nation that educates its young one has made a great investment for the future.many
country's
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benefit
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 from the university sector because of the increase in the
rate
 of youthful students while some territory
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 is a total waste of time that can lead to scarcity of job for students when they are through with school.In
this
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elabora
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this
 issue and
also
 give an outstanding opinion about it.
Firstly
,The
rate
 of young people who are willing to go to
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 higher level of
education
 increases day by day
that is
 why if
education
 is provided for them,the government earns from it in the future because without
education
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country
 will not generate much in
this
 modern world where techno has taken the lead.
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Furthermore
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,fees made from the higher rank of
education
 will be a great income to the
country
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 the other hand,due to
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rate
 of graduates seeking
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jobs in the labour
market
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 of people believe that creating room for junior university students are waste of time probably because of
lack
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 of job opportunities in
such
country
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.These set
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prefer to send their offspring to learn a trade in other to be successful in business in the future.
although
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 the end they still need
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educated citizens to run a successful business for them which still makes
education
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first
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among
amongst
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among
 all.
Nevertheless
,my humble view
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this
believes
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 is that leaders of countries should make sure
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that
that as
that's
thatas
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that
 the
rate
 of youthful graduates increases there should be
provision
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the provision
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 of
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suitable
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suit able
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suitable
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 jobs in every sector.
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