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the proportion of different types of vehicle using a major road bridge in the UK

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The provided figures highlight the percentages of various types of vehicles that used a major bridge road in the UK in the years 1965, 1985 and 2005. According to the diagram, in 1965, 47% of people, nearly half the population, used private cars to get around.
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 number increased to 55% in 1985 and reached 74% in 2005, causing serious environmental problems
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 as Air pollution and Heavy traffic. The use of recreational motors has
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 had a 5% increase which has expanded the possibility and risk of having an accident. In the years between 1965 and 1985, Lorries and other commercial vehicles' usage had a 6% growth, From 20% to 26%, due to economical problems.
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dropped to 12%.
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, The use of public transport vehicles has unfortunately decreased from 29% to 5% in only 40 years. Overall, Private cars have become the most used type of transportation.
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