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These days, more and more people are going to other countries for significant periods of time, either to find a job or to study. There are clearly many benefits to doing this, but people who live abroad can also face some difficulties. Discuss the advantages and disadvatages of working and living in a foreign country.

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as
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the most relaxing type of
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time of your life.
However
,
such
 areas are not the most enjoyable rest facilities for me. What I enjoy paying
visit
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a visit
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 to most are guesthouses in the mountains. - To deal with the problem smth might be done To deal with the polio pandemic governments together with the population might agree to stay in quarantine until
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scientists
sciencists
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scientists
 invent a vaccine so as not to spread the disease. - Set out powerful
arguments
 In spite of the fact that
sciencists
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scientists
 set out powerful
arguments
 in favour of processed foods and, what is more, they draw attention to the significant contribution in alleviating poverty made by GM goods, the common opinion is that preservatives and chemicals ,which are comprised in some sort of nutrition, are harmful and may lead to severe ailments.
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