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Writing Samples
Band 1

ome people feel that entertainers (e.g. film stars, pop musicians or sports stars) are paid too much. Do you agree or disagree? What other types of job should be highly paid?

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. It is argued by some that fast
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facilities
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freedom
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the freedom
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 to advertise their
services
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community
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proofs
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proof
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favor
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favour
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forbiding
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forbidding
promotions
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such
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cafes
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. It is argued by some that fast
food
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facilities
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 should not have
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freedom
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the freedom
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 to advertise their
services
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.
Nevertheless
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,
this
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community
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 is not capable to
offer
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proofs
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proof
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favor
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favour
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 of
forbiding
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forbidding
promotions
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such
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cafes
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • be paid too much
  • earn a high salary
  • bring in money
  • public attention
  • social value
  • save lives
  • teach the next generation
  • provide entertainment
  • hard work
  • special skill
  • take risks
  • high level of pressure
  • be good for society
  • essential job
  • deserve higher pay
  • make a real difference
  • improve quality of life
  • protect the public
  • in my opinion
  • I partly agree
  • from my point of view
  • for this reason
  • as a result
  • on the one hand
  • on the other hand
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