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It shows the different stages in the production of woolen goods.

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The given diagram indicates the process of how woollen goods are produced. Overall, it is made through seven or ten stages, which is beginning with
sheep
 and finishing with recycling or hand-made products or machine-made goods. As the diagram presents, the whole process starts with
sheep
. In the
first
 stage, the fur of
sheep
 cleans after being cut by the shears, and
then
, it is dried before being spun. In the following stage, it becomes either string to recycle or wool. In the
next
 step, the fur of
sheep
, which becomes wool, is gathered and wisted to be the tufts of wool. In the subsequent step, there are the stages that the tufts are stored and become balls of yarn, which are used for knitting or to make machine-made products
such
 as carpets and jackets and so on. Eventually, through
this
 process,
sheep
's fur comes to us as woollen goods.
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