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Some people feel that manufacturers and supermarkets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Others argue that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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The increase in the amount of packaging has become a great challenging issue nowadays.Some people believe that factories and producers have the main role in decreasing the amount of
plastic
bags
 while others think that clients should not buy
products
 with too much packaging I think supermarkets and
manufacturers
 should reduce their production of packaging
products
 and
plastic
bags
 because customers buy goods that are essential for daily life regardless of their packaging state. Increasing packaging of
products
 and
plastic
bags
 is one of the main factors that cause environmental pollution as
plastic
bags
 can remain in the
environment
 for almost four hundred years before degradation.They
also
 remain at the bottom of oceans and rivers for a long time making submarine life in danger.and difficult for marine creatures to breathe.
Manufacturers
 should produce materials and packaging
products
 that are eco-friendly.Many regulations should be applied to supermarkets and
manufacturers
 regarding overpacking.Supermarkets can
also
 apply fees on
plastic
bags
 being sold which will encourage people to use other materials that are less harmful. Customers play a minor role in
this
 issue but they should be aware of the harmful effects of unessential usage of
plastic
bags
 and packaging
products
 on the
environment
.They should
also
 reduce their usage of
plastic
bags
 and use
bags
 that are made of materials that do not cause harm to the
environment
 and can be easily recycled. In conclusion,the great amount of
bags
 and packing
products
 produced
cause
Correct subject-verb agreement
causes
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 environmental pollution.
Manufacturers
 should decrease their production to protect the
environment
 from damage.while customers should
also
 reduce their usage of unneeded
plastic
bags
.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainability
  • Eco-friendly
  • Carbon footprint
  • Excessive packaging
  • Biodegradable materials
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Consumer advocacy
  • Environmental stewardship
  • Waste reduction
  • Recycling initiatives
  • Green practices
  • Minimalist lifestyle
  • Resource conservation
  • Sustainable consumption
  • Packaging alternatives
  • Regulatory measures
  • Ethical choices
  • Environmental impact assessment
  • Renewable resources
  • Compostable packaging
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