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The change in the percentages of the homes that were owned and rented by people of England and Wales in the duration of 1918 and 2011 is illustrated in the chart.

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The change in the percentages of the homes that were owned and rented by people of England and Wales in the duration of 1918 and 2011 is illustrated in the chart. From a detailed perspective, the number of
households
 that were
ownedstarted
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owned started
owner started
 showing
a
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 increasing trend until 2001 and a slightly fell in 2011, while the fraction of the rented
house
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houses
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 showed exactly the opposite trend. From an initial analysis, it can be observed that the percentage of
households
 rented by people surpassed the owned
households
 by almost 53
percent
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 in 1918. Though a decreasing trend was noticed,
nevertheless
 people living in rented houses
was
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 greater in number until 1971 when both became equal.
However
, after 1971 the table had turned and in 1981 the
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percentage
pecentage
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percentage
 of owned
households
 surpassed the
households
 in rented
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
 by 20
percent
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. The difference kept increasing
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up to
upto
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up to
 38
percent
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 until 2001;
however
, in 2011 the difference between owned and rented household
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accommodation
accomodation
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accommodation
 reduced to 24
percent
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 gain.
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