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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten to much. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten to much. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main feature
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The provided graphs reflect percentages
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in
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for
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 particular meals.
According to
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 these charts, there were three kinds of nutrients; sodium, saturated fat and added sugar. All these kinds may be unhealthy if eaten
to
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too
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 much. These meals
consumed
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are consumed
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 in the USA.
Overall
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, after observing the provided graphs, it can be seen that breakfast had the biggest amount of it
in
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of
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 all
kind
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kinds
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.
The
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In the
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 first graph, breakfast had the least
percentage
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 (14%) and snacks had the same
percentage
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.
However
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, dinner had the biggest amount of sodium with
43
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a 43
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%
percentage
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.
The
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In the
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second
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 diagram, dinner had 37%
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percentage
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percent
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 which was the largest
percentage
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 and breakfast had only 16%.
The
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In the
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last
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 graph, snacks had the largest amount with 42%,
while
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 lunch has a small
percentage
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19
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of 19
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%. The diagrams show that every typical meal consumed in the USA contains
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percentage
Add an article
a percentage
the percentage
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 of at least 14% of nutrients that can be bad for health.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentages" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 8 times.
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