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Some people believe that employers should not be concerned about the way their employees dress, but they should be concerned about the quality of work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some individuals and
organization
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organizations
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believe
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belive
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believe
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 that
employer
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employers
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do no
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no
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not
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 need to worry about the outfit of
staffs
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staff
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,
nevertherless
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nevertheless
 they need to pay more attention
on
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work
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 productivity. From my point of view, I partly disagree that employees wear their personal clothes to
work
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 with, every company have a reception, customer service and sales staff, these are the face of the company, so
that
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they should dress
nice
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nicely
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 when meeting customers.
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, decent
dressed
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dress
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 is crucial for employees
who
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whose
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 job is
meet
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to meet
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 face to face with the customers. Especially, some fastidious
customer
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customers
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 will rate the saler by rating his or her outfit and decide to buy do product or not.
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, The receptionists have to put on their
uniform
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uniforms
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 to
work
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 and to make a good impression when talking to the clients. Meanwhile, the others
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work
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who work
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 in the office do not have to dress
nice
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nicely
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 when going to
work
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. It is trivial, they just need to wear as comfortable as they want. Due to working in the office, so that if they can feel more comfortable and
covinient
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convenient
 when wearing
a
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apply
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simple clothes, they can do better and enhance
work
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 productivity.
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, wearing simple clothes help worker save money and time to choose what to wear.
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, they can use money from saving to invest in some projects as their side jobs to enrich themselves.
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, people who
work
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 on computers may wear
T-shirt
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a T-shirt
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 and shorts to
work
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 and of
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course
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course
couse
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,couse
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 if their company
allowed
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itallowed
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, it will make them always in dynamic status. In conclusion, I strongly believe that job performance is the priority
in
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at
work
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, employees should not too crucial about appearance, as long as the staffs follow the rules to
work
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 well.

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