In many countries senior positions have higher salaries compared to those of young workers of the same company. Some people think this is not justified. Do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, In many countries, expert positions have higher salaries compared to those of inexperienced workers of the same company. Some
people
think
this
is not fair, I do not agree
this
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idea because experienced
people
should earn more than other
people
. Fİrstly, experienced
people
should earn much more than inexperienced
people
. Some
people
comply with that but it is fair because experienced
people
always manage and their
duty
is extremely difficult. inexperienced
people
's
duty
is easier than experienced
people
's,
Such
as average officer
duty
and CEO
duty
. being a CEO is a very difficult job but being an officer is not difficult as being a CEO,
Therefore
experienced
people
must earn a high
salary
.
Secondly
, experienced
people
work harder than young
people
. Young
people
do not good at taking risks, İf they don't take risks they would not reach their aim. Experienced
people
have got apparent characteristic features
such
as leadership and management. due to
this
feature, experienced
people
earn a high
salary
but young
people
have not got
this
feature. Young
people
can not manage their company because they have not got
this
ability. To conclude. there are many reasons why experienced
people
earn
high
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salary
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. I totally agree on every reason because they deserve it. Young
people
do not earn the same amount of money because they lack experience. Professor suggested that young
people
should work hard to be experienced. İf they work hard they would earn a high
salary
. Experienced
people
have got
a lots
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of
skill
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at
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different sections but young
people
are very limited.
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