You recently bought a piece of equipment for your kitchen but it did not work. You phoned the shop but no action was taken. Write a letter to the shop manager. In your letter x describe the problem with the equipment x explain what happened when you phoned the shop x say what you would like the manager to do

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

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letter in connection with an

oven

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toaster that I bought on 20th September from one of your

branch

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in London. The problem is that I plugged in the

oven

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upon I unboxed it at home and I realised that the

oven

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was unable to warm up properly. I followed the instruction many times to make sure about the

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of installation.

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, I phoned your customer service for

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immediate help, but

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there was no answer on your part. I would like you fully understand the situation and help me to change

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equipment as soon as possible. The serial number of the product is 2586554 which is written on the invoice. Please inform me about the possible way I will be able to

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receive

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receive

my new

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through an email provided in your shop. I am looking forward to hearing from you very soon Yours faithfully Amir Safa

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

158 words

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