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Genetic engineering for both medical and agricultural purposes is causing increasing amount of controversy. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of genetic engineering and explain your opinion.

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It is hard to deny that genetic engineering for whatever purpose may cause some bad influences
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society when
people
 develop it in
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 way, and
such
 a fact leads impressionable
people
 to generate the opinion that developing genetic engineering has more disadvantages than advantages, as the results which cause by wrong behaviours could throw society into chaos.
However
,
such
 a statement suffers from both logical and factual fallacies, and it should be examined meticulously. As far as national
status
, survival of
mankind
 and feasibility are concerned, I strongly hold that genetic engineering in
medicine
 and
agriculture
 will bring us more benefits in the long run.
First
 and foremost, doing some genetic engineering research in
medicine
 or
agriculture
 can elevate the national
status
, as the level of scientific development is a symbol of national
status
. To be more specific, with the development of technology and
economy
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, more and more countries attach importance to scientific research.
However
, developing genetic engineering in
medicine
 or
agriculture
 may lead to an unprecedented achievement for the country in terms of the scientific field, as
such
 an act is a good way to improve the
status
 of the country.
Furthermore
, the fact that developing genetic engineering related to
medicine
 or
agriculture
 can provide more possibilities for the survival of
mankind
. Take the case of
the
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special rice, which is a product of genetic engineering. the total grain output has been increased because of the invention of
this
 special rice, letting more
people
 not suffer from hunger which causes the death of
mankind
. Take another case of the well-known King pill, which is a drug used to treat cancer.
this
 pill is very expensive so many families can not afford it in the past. the drug output has
been
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as
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 the use of genetic engineering, so patients can buy it at a low price.
Therefore
, had it not been for developing genetic engineering, we would never have been able to improve the possibility of
mankind
's survival.
Nevertheless
, a voice arises that genetic engineering for whatever purpose will bring society a lot of problems when
people
 develop it for personal purposes or interests as it may disrupt social order. Ironically, the government has already made some laws related to genetic engineering to restrict
people
's behaviour, and if the relevant authorities increase the supervision of
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scientific research institutions, the problems mentioned above can be effectively avoided.
Therefore
, developing genetic engineering is feasible. In conclusion, I maintain that the country should develop genetic engineering for both medical and agricultural purposes as
such
 policy is feasible to implement, and benefits our national
status
 and the survival of
mankind
. Admittedly, as my favourite quote from James Madison goes,as long as the reason of man continues fallible, different opinions will be formed, and some
people
 may oppose me.
However
, I believe they will compromise after being exposed to my articles.
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