Many countries are experiencing population growth and need more homes. Should these new houses be constructed in existing cities or should new towns be built in the countryside?

Across all countries around the world,
population
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the population
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tends to increase and
people
require more
home
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homes
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. There is a debate whether new
houses
should be built in existing
cities
or should new
towns
be built in the
countryside
. In the following
paragraphs
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we will discuss
on
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the pros and cons of
this
statement. The advantages of building more
houses
in
cities
are that there are more facilities in terms of career, school and activities for these
people
who wish to construct in
towns
.
However
, the more building there will be in
cities
, the
more dense
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will be the traffic jams.
Moreover
, the flow of vehicles will increase, creating more pollution. Inadvertently, for building new
houses
, green spaces and trees are being removed in the city to accommodate these new infrastructures and eventually more harm is made to the environment. On the other side, building new
towns
in the
countryside
will decongest the traffic jam in
cities
but
also
it will give importance to
countryside
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the countryside
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such
as more
tourists
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tourist
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visits , job opportunities and
also
commercial development which will boost
up
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the economy of the town. Definitely, the idea to build
town
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a town
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in the
countryside
will be of good benefit.
However
,
countryside
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the countryside
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are
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is
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perceived as
peaceful
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a peaceful
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place for
preservation
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the preservation
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of green spaces. Some
people
may disagree
for
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building
towns
in
such
beautiful places as it will destroy
this
peacefulness and the beauty and origin of these places. In conclusion, the trend of construction of new
houses
will continue but the authorities will have to ensure that the preservation of nature is respected . I believe that both building
houses
in the
countryside
and
cities
have their advantages and disadvantages, but the most
importantly
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is where
people
feel happy to live
in
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.
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