The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of a species of large fish called the salmon. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagrams depict the different stages of salmon’s life cycle.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
according to
the size and age of salmon they live in three different places. At the
begining
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beginning
of
life
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the life
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cycle, adult fish shift from
sea
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the sea
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to
upper
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the upper
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river
, where water flow is slow.
Then
, eggs are
layed
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laid
played
between small
stone
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stones
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and reeds. Five to six months
latter
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later
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layed
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lay
eggs become fries which are 3-8 cm long tiny fish. After that, they come to the downside of the
river
where
water
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flow is running fast.
Nearly
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4 years they live
their
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and increase their body length to 12-15 cm before becoming smolts. Smolts move to sea from
river
. They have been living
approximately
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5 years and convert to adult salmons which are five times larger than smolts.
Then
, they
ready
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for breading and move to
upper
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the upper
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river
for
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to
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lay eggs.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words river with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "move" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater streams
  • small pebbles
  • reeds
  • alevin
  • yolk sac
  • nourishment
  • fry
  • grow stronger
  • grow larger
  • parr
  • defined markings
  • estuaries
  • smolt
  • adapt to saltwater
  • ocean
  • full size
  • sexual maturity
  • spawn
  • life cycle
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