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Government should benefit the long time job seekers. Give reasons and examples under what conditions and who should get the unemployment benefits

It is a crucial thing that everyone should be employed, as the governments provide special privileges for the
job
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 seekers by giving them
unemployment
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fund
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funds
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.
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easy
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 will demonstrate the reasons along with examples
whether
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of whether
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 it is beneficial that
long time
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long-time
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job
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 seekers should get
government
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benefits
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 or not. To commence with, there are multiple reasons
as
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why
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 the
unemployment
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 fund for the jobless candidates is unnecessary as they don’t make
efforts
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effort
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 in getting a
job
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,
in addition
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 to that they have
the
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apply
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financial backup from
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government
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the government
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. All the unemployed candidates would depend on
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 schemes rather than developing their skills.
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, in Australia, the
government
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 will provide $800 per week under
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unemployment
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the unemployment
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 scheme act which is almost equal to
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the
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weekly pay of a part-time
employer
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employment
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 as
this
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results in
resultsin
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results in
shortage
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a shortage
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 of workers.
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, the
government
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benefits
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 should be useful to the candidates who have
physical
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the physical
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 ability, can work only with certain medical conditions and
who
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apply
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are facing financial hardship. As they seek support from
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government
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the government
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 in terms of money and working rights.
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, a physically challenged person working in a retail store has lost
the
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their
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job
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 because of
lockdown
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the lockdown
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 during the pandemic time.
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, it is the
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government
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government's
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 responsibility to support
people
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 with disability under some special conditions
such
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 as
unemployment
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 funding,
subsidies
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and subsidies
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in
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on
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 electricity and water bills. Overall,
this
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 encourages them to overcome the challenges in their daily life. In conclusion,
although
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 the
government
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benefits
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 all sections of the
people
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 in
the
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apply
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society. The
government
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benefits
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 for the
long time
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long-time
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 jobseekers should
given
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be given
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 to the
people
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 who are unemployed because of disability and not to
the
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apply
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normal
people
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.

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