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Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is not deniable to say that science and Technology play a significantly fundamental in
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history
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 of industrializing the engineers usually get access to
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plenty of machines. It obviously can represent all things that we memorized
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to complete.
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 that some family groups teach their children to look up to subjects. associated with science and technology.
On the contrary
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History
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past events. It notes a variety of heroes' names who sacrificed their lives for the
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 peace It
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Therefore
, a lot of countries allow
History
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History
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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