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The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
The six pie charts compare the proportions of how different regions of the globe named, North
America
, South
America
,
Europe
, Africa,
Central
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and Central
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 and South East Asia used
water
 for industrial, agricultural and domestic purposes.
Overall
,
the
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most of the areas consumed
water
 mainly for plantations,
while
 the least for home use. Strikingly, in North
America
 and
Europe
, they mainly
water
 used for industries.
According to
 the charts,
the
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agriculture has consumed over three-
fourth
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a fourth
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 of total
water
 uses in Africa, Central and South East Asia, with 84%, 88% and 81%, respectively.
Furthermore
, 71% of
water
 consumption can be seen in South
America
. The
water
 usage for
other
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the other
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 two purposes in aforesaid countries
were
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 quite similar.
Europe
 was the highest industrial
water
 user
stood
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standing
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 at 53% , followed
North
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by North
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America
 just below half of total usage.
In addition
, 39% of
water
were
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was
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 used for agriculture and one-third of it
consumed
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was consumed
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 for domestic in North
America
 which was quite equal to
Europe
 figures.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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