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Results of a survey of people who visited four types of tourist attraction in Britain in 1999. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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 gives us a picture of the most popular attractions for
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visitors
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 Britain in 1999.
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, the table shows us the percentage of people in relation to the most attendanceble Theme
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 of all, Theme
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was
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 the most attractive way to
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 your time in Britain in 1999. And the
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 way was visiting Museums and Galleries, which was only 1% below the leader.
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 3rd and 4th places were Historic Houses & Monuments and Wildlife
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 & Zoos with 16% and 9% in order.
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wich
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parks
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 were the best in 1999. Blackpool Pleasure Beach was on the top with 47%. And
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in
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 is clear, that there was a huge gap with others. To make it clear, all the other
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 had
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 range between 10% and 17%. The gap was 30% between 1ts and 2nd places. And more
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 30% with others.
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