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The tradition that family gets together to eat meals is disappearing. What are the reasons? What are the impacts on families and societies? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In the past families used to have their
meals
 together almost every evening. It was the perfect way for the family to spend
time
 together, share about the day and reflect
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 discuss different topics. Currently, not many families have the luck to be able to have their
meals
 at the same
time
 as people are juggling work, school, kids, sports and all sorts of commitments. The
first
 reason for the disappearing tradition is our busy day-to-day schedules. People are under
time
 pressure all day,
this
 results in less free
time
 to spend with the family. Another reason could be that in the past one income was sufficient for a whole family to live from while nowadays it is very common for both parents to have a full-
time
 job. If work dictates a different starting and finishing
time
 for parents,
this
 may result in not having the chance to have
meals
 together.
Furthermore
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 it causes the mother not to have as much
time
 to cook breakfast or dinner as she has to get ready for work as well. A more specific reason for not sitting around the table in the morning could be a tight morning routine and sharing the same bathroom. While one member of the family is in the bathroom someone else is having breakfast and
then
 we rotate. Giving up valuable minutes of sleep in an overly full schedule is not something we would consider. I still feel that having
meals
 with my partner is essential and I really enjoy
this
time
. Not having
meals
 together in my view influences the family dynamics a lot. People don't have
time
 to talk about their days, connect less and have no idea what their partner or children are filling their days with.
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