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You recently organized a party for your company at a hotel. Write a letter to the hotel manager. In your letter • describe the party and how it went • explain why you were pleased with the hotel’s service • suggest some improvements that the hotel could make

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to provide feedback on our recent office event that we organized at your hotel. We organized
this
 party to celebrate our company's fifth anniversary.
Although
 I was afraid
initially
, the part went really well. We started the party by recognizing top employees and awarded them with trophies. We played several fun games and perform group activities.
Also
, I would like to thank you for providing amazing services. All the staff members were incredibly helpful and they are taking care of each individual personally.
Also
, the food was pretty awesome ,especially the lobster. One thing I noticed was that the party was missing a DJ. I would strongly recommend your hotel to my friends for big events Yours faithfully, Ishant Kesar
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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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