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As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town, Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available.

Dear
Mr.
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 Verma, I am writing to inform you that I
would
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 be
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 the historical exhibition nearby very soon with my team. So, for
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, I need a bunch of relevant information before coming for a smooth visit.
Firstly
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, I would like to ask that the list shown on the pamphlets of contents
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such
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, such
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 as books by the remarkable old era's authors
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such
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 as William Shakespeare and so on.
Apart from
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this
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, I have read that there would be an antique clock
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 is approximately 200 years old
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 that be available? Despite of contents, I would like to know the exact date of opening and closing of the exhibition
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 the timing as it was not clearly mentioned in the articles.
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 to it,
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 would be appreciated if you could let me know if there is any discount available on
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 as I am a regular member of your community in
organizing
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 public events at different places. I am looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, Jessica Alba

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coherence
Put one idea in one paragraph.
coherence
Link ideas with simple words like and, also, then.
structure
Keep the greeting at the start and the closing at the end.
task
State your purpose in the first line.
style
Use plain words and short sentences.
grammar
Fix small grammar errors and spell words clearly.
content
Tell exact dates and hours if you know them.
tone
Polite tone.
content
You ask for the main facts needed.
structure
There is a greeting and closing.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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