The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The illustrations demonstrate the comparison of Science
Park
in 13 years. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it is readily apparent that some
park
areas have been altered for the purpose of education, research and development over years. Considering in the northern part of the
park
, in 2008, there was grassland which is replaced with
research
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the research
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and development
centre
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centres
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today.
Additionally
, the reception has been replaced with a University hub and the building remained adjacent to the offices. South of these facilities, business units remained unchanged over years,
however
, car
park
territory has been decreased to ensure more for Cyber security building. The field of grassland and woodland has been reduced for cyber security too. In the south of the Science
Park
, IT Centre has been substituted with
Innovation
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the Innovation
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centre
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, a new station has been constructed on the railway which has been connected with Innovation Center, car
park
and Cyber security with
path
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a path
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.
Finally
, bike routes to the right and left sides of the roads and
bus
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a bus
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stop to the east side of the
park
have been added.
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