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The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a science park in 2008 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustrations demonstrate the comparison of Science
Park
 in 13 years. Looking from an
overall
 perspective, it is readily apparent that some
park
 areas have been altered for the purpose of education, research and development over years. Considering in the northern part of the
park
, in 2008, there was grassland which is replaced with
research
Correct article usage
the research
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 and development
centre
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centres
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 today.
Additionally
, the reception has been replaced with a University hub and the building remained adjacent to the offices. South of these facilities, business units remained unchanged over years,
however
, car
park
 territory has been decreased to ensure more for Cyber security building. The field of grassland and woodland has been reduced for cyber security too. In the south of the Science
Park
, IT Centre has been substituted with
Innovation
Correct article usage
the Innovation
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centre
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Centre
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, a new station has been constructed on the railway which has been connected with Innovation Center, car
park
 and Cyber security with
path
Correct article usage
a path
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.
Finally
, bike routes to the right and left sides of the roads and
bus
Correct article usage
a bus
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 stop to the east side of the
park
 have been added.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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