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Questionnaire that asked visitors to the Parkway Hotel how they rated the hotel's customer service. The same questionnaire was given to 100 guests in the years 2005 and 2010.

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Two pie charts give us a picture of
customers
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feedback
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 about
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the operating
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operating
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 of the customer support team in the Parkway Hotel.
Firstly
, the left pie chart
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describes
descpibes
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describes
 us the work of customer service in 2005. Here we can see, that on the top was
satisfactory
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the satisfactory
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 evaluation of service with a 45% rate.
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,
on
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the 2-nd and
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3-rd places were poor and very poor marks with 21% and 15% ratio. Nextly, the right pie chart shows us customers' feedback in 2010. And if we compare
2
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charts, we are able to see the growing trend
of
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 support quality. In 2010
on
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the
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1-st place was good evaluation - 39%.
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, the 2-nd place was for
excellent
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an excellent
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 mark with 28%. And on top of that,
on
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 the 3-rd place was
satisfactory
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a satisfactory
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 ratio with the number of 12%. To sum up, we can see the difference
with
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without
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 no
doubts
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doubt
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. The quality of
support
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the support
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 team grew rapidly through the years.
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