After leaving school or university, young people should choose a job or career that they love, rather than one that pays the best salary. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Do you agree or disagree?

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in our life.
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who educate us from the time we are born until we go to school. • On the one hand,
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to behave and how to take with adults and friends ,
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, we learn from those around us, we are brought up by watching them, especially we are brought up by looking
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is good, if you treat everyone nicely,
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gave them a good upbringing, but they will never say that their teachers are good,
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. • In conclusion, the best teachers in our life are our
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, they are the only
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