Many people today arewarded about young children using video games.what problems might these games goes for children. what could these problem be reduce?

In the modern era, teenagers are using video
games
. That's why their parents are worried about it.
This
essay aims to explore the root
cause
which triggers
this
solution and will try to find the feasible measure to alleviate
this
. To comments with the main
cause
of the
problem
is that
children
are addicted to computers due to which they cannot focus on their studies. To tackle
this
situation, we should try to keep away from these gadgets and divert their mind to other activities
such
as playing dancing singing etc.
For example
, when
children
have leisure
time
for other activities, that
time
parents should motivate
to
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them to
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play outdoor
games
.
Secondly
, another
cause
of
this
problem
is that it affects health
also
. If
children
have used access amount of phone and computer. It directly affects their eyes and brain system.
Furthermore
,
children
become over-weighted day by day. The solution
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not
give
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money to buy the subscription of
games
. The
third
cause
of
this
problem
is
children
may become
an
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apply
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introvert person. Because all day they spend
time
on video
games
and do not have
time
to meet with their friends and family members. To solve
this
problem
government should apply some
boundationS
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foundation
foundations
on
games
like do not play a game
more
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for more
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than half an hour.
for example
, in foreign countries, many
games
are bounded by
authority
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such
as pubg blueprint and many other
games
. To conclude
this
, government and parents are both responsible for playing video
games
by
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with
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teenagers.
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