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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child Write a letter to the parents.In your letter •explain why you would like the job •give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ. •say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia.

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Dear Sir and Madam, I read the advertisement in
magazine
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 that you are looking for a
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caretaker
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care taker
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caretaker
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 for
yourchild
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your child
. I would like to care
of
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for
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 your son for the
next
 6 months. I like to play with children as I
also
 have a younger brother who is very close to my heart.
Also
, I have an experience
of
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as
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 baby sitter though,
I
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though I
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have not continued it for a longer period of time because of my studies. Now I took my semester off and I am looking for a part-time job so that I could earn some money
and
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apply
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I find
this
 job to be perfect for me.
Moreover
, I know
french
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the french
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 language which would be a plus point if you want your son to learn it. If you'll hire me for
next
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the next
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 few months
then
 I
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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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