Nowadays many people have access to computers and a large number of children enjoy playing video games. What are the advantages and disadvantages of playing video games for children?

These days more citizens have obtained access to electronic
games
and
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number of adolescents have
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pleasure playing
computarized
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computerized
games
. The main
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benefits
benefit
benefis
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benefits
of
this
are acquiring great
skills
on computers and learning academic subjects;
however
, the drawbacks are lack of social
skills
and isolation. Playing electronic
games
might benefit some
children
by acquiring great
skills
on computers because they spend so many hours playing
this
.
Firstly
, adolescents are not afraid of turning on computers or electronic devices and they learn many
skills
on how to manage
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, so they
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familiarize
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with laptops or electronic
games
.
Furthermore
, some of
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video
games
have great academic materials that help them to improve
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at school. They learn how to memorize complex concepts in a fun way that
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school more enjoyable.
For instance
, In The United States,
children
who start
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kindergarten
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kindergarten
have
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free access to an app
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" Seasame Street"
this
is a bilingual app that
help
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them to improve
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english
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their english
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and memorize the alphabet in a pleasant way.
However
, one can not be blind and ignore that some of these
children
tend to
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lack
of
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social
skills
by playing so many hours
computerized
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video
games
.
Although
this
might help them, some of these pre-teens do not like to talk to each other, so they have no idea how to start a natural conversation. Another drawback is that many of them ended up suffering from isolation because they have not met other people to get along with. More importantly, some of them need
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psychological
phychological
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psychological
help to teach them how to start a friendship with other
children
. To explain
further
, in California many teenagers suffer from depression because they spend too
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may
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hours playing
playstation
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PlayStation
that they have no social relationships with people
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their age, so
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this
situation
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into a disease. To conclude, having
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access
acces
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access
to computerized
games
might be
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way to improve some computer
skills
;
however
,
this
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to be
with
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a
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time to avoid suffering from isolation or losing the ability
on
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apply
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how to communicate with others.
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