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the percentage of adults in urban and rural areas who took part in four free time activities in 1990 and 2010. Summarize the information and compare where relevant, by selecting and reporting the key features.

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The table shows the variety of different leisure time activities of adults in urbanized and rural
areas
 in 1990 and 2010.
First
 of all, reading is the most popular entertainment
for
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in
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both
 1990 and 2010. In 1990 people from rural
areas
 were more interested in reading than
urbans
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urban
 with
the
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a
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 10% gap between numbers.
Nevertheless
, in 2010 reading ratio increased in
both
 cases. But, we
also
 can notice the equality between
number
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a number
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 of readers in two of those
areas
.
Next
, animated play remained
stadily
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steadily
 for urban places through the years with
10
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a 10
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% rate in 1990 and 2010.
In
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oppsite
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opposite
, we can notice that
popularity
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the popularity
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 of animated
play
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plays
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 for rural locations decreased
for
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by
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 4% in 2010. To continue, playing activities become less popular in urban
areas
 in 2010,
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 ratio lowered
on
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to
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 8%.
By
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In
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a
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apply
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contrast, for
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people
poople
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people
 from rural
areas
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,areas
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this
 ratio did not change and remained
26
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at 26
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% for
both
 1990 and 2010. In the end, photography showed
stable
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 increasing trend
for
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in
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both
areas
. The
growing
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 was similar for all - 10% through the past 20 years.
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