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Rising university fees and scarce employment prospects for graduates have led some people to say that universities should not teach arts subjects, like philosphy and history, and only offer practical degree courses that maximize the chances of employment. To what extent do you agre or disagree?

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The bar chart shows the percentage of various economic industries (finance, food processing, manufacturing, tourism, oil, coal and gas) in Brazil from 2009 to 2019, and the prediction for 2029.

 Overall, the proportion of Brazilian businesses saw the largest number during the period, whereas those of food processing and manufacturing contributed the least section to the economy.
In addition
, every item has fluctuated in these 20 years, except for commerce. The percentage of finance which always took the lead, exhibited an upward trend, at just over 30% in 2009, and went up to around 37% in 2019, predicted to increase to approximately 42% in 2029.
In contrast
, manufacturing experienced the opposite trend, which was about 22% at the beginning, falling to around 16% in ten years, estimated to decrease to only 5% in 2029. 

It is worth noting that the proportion of food processing was at around 11% in 2009, and
then
 reached a peak of more than double after ten years, before dropping to its previous level in 2029.
Likewise
,
this
 trend was the same as those of oil, coal and gas.
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