Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects.other people think that, in today's world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Somebody
believe
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that the most
field
in school is
history
while
another
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other
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people
argue that modern
lessons
like
science
and
technology
are have
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more importance.I believe that two subjects are obligatory for
students
and have to learn them well. On the one hand,
people
are thinking that
History
is more important than other
lessons
.
students
should know what happened in
history
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the history
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of their country ?and they have to take
lessons
of
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past
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the past
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.
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,
the
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Iranian
students
should understand that many years ago Iran has the strongest empress
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name was Hakhamaneshian.if
students
know their
history
,they
proud
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to
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their past and they are trying hard to make
good
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a good
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future for their country.
On the other hand
,some other
people
,believe that
science
and
technology
are more useful for
students
. I think that
students
should
to
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be careful
to
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about
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science
and
technology
because they have
a
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wide different
field
in them.
for
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instead
,
technology
include
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of
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many subjects that one of
them
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which
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is nanotechnology
which
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and
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people
in
this
field
are trying to study something
in
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nano size. So
students
should learn
science
and
technology
and know their
sub branches
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sub-branches
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and find their concern
field
.they can search
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in
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inn
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in
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their beloved subjects and find new things.
science
and
technology
are very important for improving
quality
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the quality
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of our life. In conclusion,some
people
believe that
history
lessons
is
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are
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the most important and other argue that
science
and
technology
is
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are
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more useful.
i
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I
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personally think that
history
and
science
are very useful for
students
.they have to learn both of them and
making
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make
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good
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a good
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future for themselves. Score 5
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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