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Write a letter to your manager to request setting up a cafeteria for the staff. In your letter, you should tell: -what you heard about the inconvenience from the staff -how you feel about it -what suggestions you have

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Dear Mr Jameson, Hello, I hope my letter finds you well. I am writing to request that a new cafeteria is considered in the new building that will be constructed
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 year. Numerous members of the design department have been increasingly complaining about the fact that there is no area for resting in the plans for the new facilities. Many have risen their voices regarding
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 matter because there is no lounge area for when employees go on lunch break. Due to
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, people have to go away to the closest park in order to find some tables and benches where they can eat their food and rest. It is important to me to make you aware of these complaints as your image as marketing manager might be getting compromised among my peers. I know you will be applying for general manager
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 month so as my mentor I would not want to see you lose
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 a big opportunity because of
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 minor mistake. I absolutely understand if
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 news might come as a shock as no colleague has said anything before.
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, I strongly believe that these arguments should be heard and addressed before
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 issues arise. If you could only advise the rest of the team that you have somehow become aware of their claims and you will include a cafeteria in the new building sketches, I believe that could definitely ease the problem. I hope you do not mind my suggestion and I look forward to hearing from you, Sincerely, Laura Espeso

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • inconvenience
  • dining options
  • negative impact
  • morale
  • productivity
  • well-being
  • feasibility
  • survey
  • interest
  • menu options
  • collaborating
  • local food vendors
  • diverse range
  • healthy and affordable
  • meal options
  • allocating
  • office building
  • spacious
  • essential amenities
  • microwaves
  • refrigerators
  • comfortable seating
  • long-term benefits
  • employee satisfaction
  • reduced downtime
  • fostering a sense of community
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