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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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There are
Two
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two
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 maps
which
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apply
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illustrating
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illustrate
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development
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the development
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 of
City
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the City
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 hospital in 2007 and 2010. In
two
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the two
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 maps,They are three differences between
two
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the two
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 years that about addition
two
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of two
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roundabout
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roundabouts
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in
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on
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two
 ends of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
, making
new
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the new
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 public car park and
building
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the building
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a
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of a
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bus station .
In
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Two
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two
 intersections of
hospital
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the hospital
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road
 with
ring
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the ring
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road
 in
north
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the north
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 and city
road
 in
south
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the south
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 were building
two
 roundabouts in 2010 .
also
 made public car park in
east
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the east
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 of the city near of ring
road
 that entrance of it being from
ring
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the ring
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road
.so staff car park being separate for staffs and its entrance is from
ring
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the ring
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road
 . In 2010,
Instead
 of
bus
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a bus
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stop
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,stop
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 we have a bus station
in
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apply
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west
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the west
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 of the hospital
road
 and it have access to
two
 roundabouts
in
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at
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ends
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the ends
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 of the hospital
road
.
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