The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
There are
Two
maps Fix capitalization
two
which
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apply
illustrating
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illustrate
development
of Correct article usage
the development
City
hospital in 2007 and 2010.
In Correct article usage
the City
two
maps,They are three differences between Correct article usage
the two
two
years that about addition Correct article usage
the two
two
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of two
roundabout
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roundabouts
in
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on
two
ends of hospital
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the hospital
road
, making new
public car park and Add an article
the new
building
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the building
a
bus station .
Change preposition
of a
In
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Two
two
intersections of hospital
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the hospital
road
with ring
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the ring
road
in north
and city Correct article usage
the north
road
in south
were building Add an article
the south
two
roundabouts in 2010 .also
made public car park in east
of the city near of ring Add an article
the east
road
that entrance of it being from ring
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the ring
road
.so staff car park being separate for staffs and its entrance is from ring
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the ring
road
.
In 2010, Instead
of bus
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a bus
stop
we have a bus station Add a comma
,stop
in
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apply
west
of the hospital Add an article
the west
road
and it have access to two
roundabouts in
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at
ends
of the hospital Correct article usage
the ends
road
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