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Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree?

#salary #job #satisfaction
Job
 satisfaction is less important than big income. I disagree with
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 statement. In
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 I will explain reasons why
i
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 do not agree. People averagely spend around 40 years
to
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work
. With time expiration our
knowledge’s
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 and experience increase and
this
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is
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 most valuable in the eyes
employer
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. The more knowledge and experience you have most likely you will
more
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earn. Statistics and
researches
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tells
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 that people who earn a lot
those
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 who are aged and have annual experience in the same area. The logic is “the more you will
work
 in one
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, the more you will earn” To get to
this
 level when individual
work
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 at one
job
many
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 years.
Individual
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 probably should be satisfied with
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their job
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job
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jobs
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.
At
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first
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year
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years
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 big salary will have a huge influence
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job
 satisfaction, but if
individual
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an individual
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not
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is not
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 satisfied with
job
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, it brings stress and fatigue. With time expiration he starts hating
job
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,
as a
result
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 he has a bad quality of
work
, and fact that every employer will not be happy to have employee’s who hate what they are doing.
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 if
individual
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an individual
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satisfied
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is satisfied
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 with
job
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, he will be more productive and creative at
job
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, which brings him career growth and logically he will earn more. Every employer would be happy to have
this
 kind of
employee’s
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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