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Nowadays, many people change jobs quite regularly, rather than working in the one company for their entire careers. Why do you think this is happening? How can companies keep their workers?

#people #change #jobs #company #careers #companies #workers
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 to see
workers
 who worked in
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one
company
 for their entire
life
 since
workers
 usually tend to switch
companies
through
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 their
career
life
.
workers
 are looking for more
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work-life
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work
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life
 balance and
flixability
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flexibility
 and
career
growth
opportunities
 to end with being fulfilled and satisfied with jobs.
Companies
 need to put more effort
in
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 knowing their
workers
 need to increase their loyalty
for
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 the
company
 and find
a
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meaning and purpose to devote their working
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lifetime
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life time
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for
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 the same
company
. I think one of the main reasons
employee
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employees
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 are changing
companies
 regularly is the search for
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work-life
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work
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work-life
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life
 balance. during the pandemic working from home became more common and it provided more flexibility for the
employee
. one
the
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 important causes is the
opportunities
 for
career
growth
, not all
companies
 provide those choices and being satisfied with your job is important for staying committed to it, those are two main reasons that are causing
employee
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 to switch
companies
 searching for better
career
 choices in their
life
.
Companies
 can contribute
in
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 keeping their
employee
 by putting their needs into consideration.
This
 can help
companies
 gain the loyalty of their
worker
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work
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 and increase a sense of belonging in their
work
 environment. Providing
opportunities
 for
career
growth
are
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 essential for employees,
hence
 it creates a sense of meaning and
increase
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 their
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commitment
committment
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commitment
 to the
company
. to
summ
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sum
 it up, a small action
such
 as
survey
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a survey
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 and taking feedback for
further
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improvement
improvment
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improvement
 can make a big
different
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difference
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 for both
of
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the
company
 and their employees. As we can see, now it takes more effort to retain
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an employee
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employee
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employees
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 for a longer period of time.
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Employees
Employee
Emoplyee
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Employees
are
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 looking for more job satisfaction and
companies
 can’t lure them by just paying higher salaries
instead
 they need to offer more
opportunities
 for
career
growth
 and job
fulfillment
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fulfilment
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 to make the
work
 environment a meaningful place to wake up every morning.
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