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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

#summarise #information #features #comparisons
The graph below demonstrates that a country’s
GDP
 cost
on
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 three areas,
such
 as health , education , roads and
railways
,
proportion
during
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from
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 2000 to 2025.
To begin
 with, it is obvious that the
proportion
 of the money on
heath
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health
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 people cost steadily increasing while the roads and
railways
 take up less and less
proportion
 of
GDP
 during the 20 years from 2000 to 2025 and become the lowest
percentage
 of
GDP
 in 2025 though it takes the highest
proportion
 at the beginning, and both of the health and roads and
railways
 occupied the same
percentage
 which
are
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 approximately 4
percentage
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 of
GDP
 around 2006, and they
finally
 take up the
proportion
 of
GDP
 are 7.5 and 2.6 respectively. As for
the
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education, it begins with the lowest
percentage
 of GPD and
punctual
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during
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the
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2000 to 2025 and
finally
become
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becomes
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 higher
as
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at
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 4.2
percentage
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per cent
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 than the beginning around less than 3
percentage
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per cent
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 and
be
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is
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 the midst
proportion
 of GPD
compare
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compared
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 to health and road and
railways
.
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If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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