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People today increasingly use credit cards to make monthly purchases. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent days, bank
cards
 play an important role in serving the financial aspect of life. Due to
this
, the use of variation
cards
 has become popular among people to make their regular payments. In my view, it is extremely beneficial to use
such
cards
, despite some of the drawbacks. In
this
 case, I personally believe that beneficial of
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cards
 outweigh the disadvantages. There are several advantages of
owing
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 a
credit
card
.
To begin
 with, these
cards
 are user-friendly. Not only
this
, but it is very convenient while making hefty purchases as one is not required to deal with counting cash.
In addition
, using
credit
cards
 enables
a
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people to
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access
acess
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access
the
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loans effortlessly.
The
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card
 owners who maintain a good economical record by paying on time or other financial crimes can build high
credit
 scores which them to be qualified for lending money without doing other formalities.
For instance
,
private
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card
 provides car loans to their loyal customers.
Moreover
, banks can provide a
card
 where there is a certain amount that
person
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 can expend, is it clear that after require to pay, a while and possibly with interest
.
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 There are cases when protection from banks is unreliable and in case of an error, the
card
 can conclude. To conclude,
although
 most
of
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the
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credit
cards
 are
high priced
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.
However
, I think that it has many other benefits which overshadow
this
 disadvantage, as it constructed financial reputation and
provide
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provides
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 loans
people
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to people
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 to
fulfill
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 their personal needs
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cashless transactions
  • Financial footprint
  • Interest rates
  • Credit score
  • Consumerism
  • Debt accumulation
  • Expenditure tracking
  • Fraudulent activities
  • Overspending
  • Purchase protection
  • Revolving credit
  • Creditworthiness
  • Impulse buying
  • Secured credit card
  • Unsecured credit card
  • Spending limit
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