Some people say History is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that, in today’s world, subjects like Science and Technology are more important than History. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the past
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humanity has
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tremendous
history
. Year by year the famous
intellegences
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intelligences
intelligence
discovered
the
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new sciences and technologies. In the contemporary
world
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some
people
think that
history
is 1 of the most important school
subjects
while others mind that today
Science
and
Technology
more
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are more
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important.
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discussed
on both views and mind on my personal statement.
First
of all, it is undeniable fact that without
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education
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applying
apllying
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applying
for
job
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the job
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is impossible. As a matter of fact, the
subjects
like
Science
and
Technology
help to look for jobs with high
salary
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salaries
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. On the one hand, it s necessary to get
high
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salary because of
expensive
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prices. The
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of every country
always
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is always
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on
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a
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growth. If
people
stop learning more information,
useful
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and useful
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subject and thinking more about
own
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future, problems come gradually.
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the consequences can lead to changing mentality. Not all
people
will not able to understand
the
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science
and
technology
. I guess I
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could
coul
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can
remark that
History
is more important than today's
subjects
. The reason for
this
is that
history
of evolution, population, place and nature
is
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very rich. The modern industry should think more about personal traits,
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and relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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with each other in comparison with
career
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careers
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and
job
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jobs
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.
Unfortunately
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people
become selfish thanks to the
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development
developement
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development
in job spheres.
Secondly
,
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about
history
is a bad case.
People
should not forget that everything has
limit
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. Our life is not forever. To conclude I would like to say that the
subjects
like
Science
and
Technology
never replace
History
.
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, in the
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twenty
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first
century
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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