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More and more people are working from home rather than at the workplaces. Some people say this will bring benefits to the workers and their families. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Using the internet people can change their way of doing their duties when it is possible to sit in
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 house and complete
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 tasks just by clicking on
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 laptop keyboard so without a doubt working remotely from home
instead
 of working at the workplace has become popular among more and more people. There are certain pros and cons to
this
 phenomenon for both employees as well as
companies
 which offer their job positions online.
This
 essay will intend to analyse both views along with my perspective. On the one ,hand great merit of working remotely for
companies
 is that they can benefit from hiring their employers with lower salaries from countries with not a suitable economic situation
such
 as India meanwhile a major drawback of
this
 situation is that
companies
 cannot monitor their workforce which can lead to many issues
such
 as leaking
companies
 private data. Many people prefer to work from their homes and save travelling time and money.They can work for massive
companies
 with higher salaries and live in the suburban or a smaller city with lower living costs or even benefit from spending more time with their family ,
on the other hand
, working remotely can lead to working
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unsocial hours and juggling between life and work while for those who live by themselves can bring isolation. All in all, I for one deem that both employers and
companies
 whose has the right infrastructure can benefit from
this
 new phenomenon while
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those
companies
 which have security issues should not consider
this
 option.
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