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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Just like A coin has
both
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 heads and tails, which comes along
in
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 staying in the same
company
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 for
rest
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the rest
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 of their career, and moving from one industry to another. We will discuss
both
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the
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views in the below essay in my own opinion.
To Begin
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 with, People who remain in the same field can develop working relationships with
there
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 co-workers which can make
him
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work
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efficiently
efficiency
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efficiently
in
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 any task, that ability the
work
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 they
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 to do
in
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the
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 daily basis, A Perfect example
for
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this
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 is: Satya Nadella, (C.E.O of Microsoft) is stated his success story is solely dependent on how he persuaded his life within the
company
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 that leads to his personal development along with the development of the
company
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. We can see through his life, that no matter where we
work
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 if we put in the
work
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 we will be heard down the line.
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, people who transitioned from one
company
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 to another can have
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 own perks and they will be learning to
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adapt
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adopt
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adapt
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 to the new culture every time they change the
company
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,
that
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which
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 can build them a stronger
person
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,
both
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 professionally and personally.
For instance
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; Stephan Winkelmann (C.E.O of Bugatti & Lamborghini)
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worked in
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 of
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 and made his mark
and
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he changed his life from one
company
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 to another and ultimately
working
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 on
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both
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 the brands at the same time, by that understanding we can see that global
understand
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 can only possible if move around that can challenge you. In summary, A person can only learn so far until he sees himself, In
this
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essay
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 we discussed
about
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two successful people who made a mark in the fortune 500. In my opinion, in
both
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 cases, we can see that they pursued
they’re
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 own pattern of achievement which makes them successful in
there
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their
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 own way.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Longevity
  • Corporate ladder
  • Adaptability
  • Comfort zone
  • Professional network
  • Diverse skill set
  • Industry exposure
  • Innovation
  • Resilience
  • Seniority
  • Job market
  • Career trajectory
  • Company culture
  • Professional growth
  • Job security
  • Promotion prospects
  • Cross-functional experience
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