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The figure below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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Given is a figure illustrating the proportion of purchasing businesses that made e-commerce - listed manufacturing,construction,wholesale,retail and
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 & communications- in Canada from 2015 to 2019. From the
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 supplied it is evident that the most numerical data were for the sake of
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 and communications in
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 figure.Other sectors,
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, had a moderate level of popularity. In 2015, the most proportions were for
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 businesses while the least was for
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 trend was preserved from 2016 to 2018 as in 2019 the retail percentage was a mere fewer than others. With regard to manufacturing,
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 field experienced a peak at somewhere in the vicinity of 60% in 2019, while in 2015 experienced the lowest rate ( approximate 30%). The graph for constructions and wholesale,
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, shows a staircase process in which the highest step is for 2019 and the shortest is for 2015.
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 trend had not seen in retail and communication as retail bars fluctuated somewhere between 50% and 60% from 2016 to 2019 as well as
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 proportions fluctuated somewhere between 60% and 70% during all years calculated(2015 to 2019).

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