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The figure below shows the proportion of businesses making e-commerce purchases by industry in Canada between 2015 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

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Given is a figure illustrating the proportion of purchasing businesses that made e-commerce - listed manufacturing,construction,wholesale,retail and
information
 & communications- in Canada from 2015 to 2019. From the
information
 supplied it is evident that the most numerical data were for the sake of
information
 and communications in
this
 figure.Other sectors,
Nevertheless
, had a moderate level of popularity. In 2015, the most proportions were for
information
 businesses while the least was for
constructions
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this
 trend was preserved from 2016 to 2018 as in 2019 the retail percentage was a mere fewer than others. With regard to manufacturing,
this
 field experienced a peak at somewhere in the vicinity of 60% in 2019, while in 2015 experienced the lowest rate ( approximate 30%). The graph for constructions and wholesale,
however
, shows a staircase process in which the highest step is for 2019 and the shortest is for 2015.
This
 trend had not seen in retail and communication as retail bars fluctuated somewhere between 50% and 60% from 2016 to 2019 as well as
information
 proportions fluctuated somewhere between 60% and 70% during all years calculated(2015 to 2019).
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