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Nowadays, the traditions and customs of the food we eat and the way we eat it are changing what is the way they have change and what do you think about the change.

#traditions #customs #food #change
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The bar chart and table compare five countries in terms of the percentage of
families
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 with high-speed
internet
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 access, and the change over two consecutive years, from 2001 to 2002. It is clear that the percentage of
families
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 with high-speed
internet
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 connection was highest in South Korea and the USA during those years.
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, the biggest change in the number of
families
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 with high-speed
internet
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 access occurred in Britain. In 2001, about 11.2% of South Korean households had access to high-speed
internet
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, compared to 9.3% of US
families
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. One year later, the number of US
families
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 with high-speed
internet
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 soared by 170% to reach 25.11% of the population, which was the highest figure of all measured countries for those years.
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, the growth rate was significantly lower in South Korea, at only 20%. High-speed
internet
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 was not as common in Germany, Switzerland and Britain, with only roughly 0.35% of households having a high-speed connection. All three countries saw significant increases over the year, with Germany and Switzerland witnessing increases of 80% and 120% respectively. Meanwhile, Britain saw the biggest growth rate in high-speed
internet
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 connections with a 230% increase.
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