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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
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 of human believes that trainees should have high education what they prefer,
however
 at
this
 moment others do that they should get knowledge in
subjects
,
such
 as science and technology, which will be beneficial for them in
time
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 ahead. In
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 I will explain both edges. From my point of view people, who think about
usefulness
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the usefulness
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 of one certain area of education have
unpleasant
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an unpleasant
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experience
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 in
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their career
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career
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,
such
 as low salary, lack of amazing projects,
minor
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 amount of business trips
and
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etc. After
it
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 they relate all these mentioned failures to the studied major at university.
Furthermore
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 they prevent their independents not to choose certain
subjects
. Because of not having their preferable major, they can suffer from
this
 decision. From my
perspective
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 students should select
major
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 on their own, in order to have
successful
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a successful
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life
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 in the future. They feel happier studying on
favorite
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subjects
 and
penetrate
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 deeply
to
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it
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 absorbing all knowledge as a sponge. These learners approach
to
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all with big desire, not only to get
good
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a good
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mark
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. After
graduation
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 they can be professionals
of
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 their occupation. It is can be established win-win for both
side
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. On the one
hand
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 people work with pleasure
on
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the favored
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favored
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 job.
On the other
hand
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 the employer’s business has benefit from it, while high-minded specialists
working
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 as one team. To sum up, individuals have
chance
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 to choose
best
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 option for them. Even if it is advised not to apply for any
subjects
 from other acquainted, people should prove their necessity of selecting
exact
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an exact
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 variation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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