Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

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television and in computer games is very common, the society said it but, is it a problem?
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and every animal in the world is a danger but what about
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the most violent animal because
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the animal that kills more than all so we can see people that love
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if you see the TV or play a videogame you can see
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everywhere your favourite sport is so dangerous but lots of people just said he loves the team when he is
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to the rival or when you play on the computer you kill lot's and lot's of animals there is no matter if you are underage you
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violence
is not really necessary in order to be happy but the TV and the videogames
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say the same because if there isn't blood it will fail and isn't interesting so
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in my opinion
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society is very violent so
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you have to help and say the
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be careful with the animals and don't be part of the problem
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pivotal
  • desensitize
  • catalyst
  • predisposed
  • harmless outlet
  • distinguish
  • controlled environments
  • empirical research
  • minimal or no direct correlation
  • socio-economic status
  • predisposition
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