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Percentage of australian men and women doing regular activity in 2010

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The bar chart shows information about the regular exercise routine of Australian men and women of different
age
 groups
percentage
-wise in 2010. Overall, what stands out from the graph is that younger males and older females are doing more regular physical exercises than others
age
 groups. Looking into the details, about 52.8% of males between the
age
group
 of 15 to 24 do regular exercise which is the highest
percentage
 of exercise in men across all
age
 groups.
Similarly
, around 53.3% of females between the
age
group
 of 45 to 54 do regular physical activity. There is generally an upward trend in physical activity in Australian women starting from the
percentage
 of 47.7% in the
age
group
 of 15 to 24 and touching its peak at 53.3% in the
age
group
 of 45 to 54. There is a marginal decrease in the
percentage
 of 0.3% in the
age
group
 of 55 to 64
then
 there is a sharp decrease in the
percentage
 to 47.1% in the
age
group
 of 65 and over.
On the other hand
 in men, the
percentage
 is around 52.8% for the
age
group
 of 15 to 24
then
 the
percentage
 continuously decreases to 39.5% until the
age
group
 of 35 to 44. After that, the
percentage
 of physical activity of males showed an upward trend and increased to 46.7% for the
age
group
 of 65 and over.
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