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As well as making money , business also have social responsibility

#money #business #responsibility
The issue of whether businesses have a responsibility
to wards
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towards
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society
 is
open
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an open
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 debate. I partly agree that companies should have
duty
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a duty
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 to
society
. On the one hand, one of the
culprist
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culprits
culprit
 is that,
first,
a
company
 have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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society
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to society
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 will attract the good attention of many people,
that is
can
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an
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 building
an
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the
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 image of the
business
. To be more precise
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,
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that is
 the
company
 will advertise for more than people to know about their products.
For
example
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example,
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 Vinamilk helps children on
highlands
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the highlands
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 by proving their products
such
 as every year.
As a result
, Vinamilk
have
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has
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 more than
milions
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million
millions
children
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of children
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know
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known
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to
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for
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this
business
. Research has shown that the more companies do
this
, the stronger
society
 will become.
On the other hand
, the reason behind
this
 is that a small
business
have
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has
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alow
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a low
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 capital should try to focus
to
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on
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 paying
worker
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workers
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's wages.
In addition
,
business
 has to pay taxes every year, which lead to the request for more responsibilities from them to the public could be too much. As an illustration,
if
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a small
business
 on the
company
's revenue can create a lot of jobs for the
lobor
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labour
 market.
Besides
, the
business
 can
a
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apply
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balance the
company
's finances
that
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so that
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is
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it
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do
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does
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 not lead to financial high risk. In conclusion, businesses have social responsibility
it
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apply
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very well, but each
orther
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other
company
 should try to balance
betweem
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the
 revenue of
company
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the company
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 and
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the reponsibility
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reponsibility
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responsibility
society
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of society
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.
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