Some people work for the same organisation all their working life.Others think that it is better to work for different organisations.

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job they have little idea whether or not they will remain in the same

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throughout their working life.If they decide to change,they need to consider how

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their career overall. People who stay with the same

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have the advantage of

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thoroughly

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understanding how it works and becoming familiar with the staff and processes.If they work hard,their promotion prospects are good and there is likely to be greater job security, with the promise of a good pension when they retire.Employers value loyalty and may offer additional incentives to long-term employees,including bonuses and reward schemes.

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,one of the drawbacks of staying with the same

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is that the person may get stuck doing the same job year after year.In some cases,

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can lead to boredom and disillusionment.Moving from one

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to another can be

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decision in order to have variety and acquire a range of skills and experience.For an instance,I graduated from the faculty of

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I worked at different workplaces

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exhibitions

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bank which made just money

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have

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made me knowledgeable in a range of translation and relation fields and in my view

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provided me with a much more interesting working life.

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there are benefits to working for one

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.I feel that it is

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valuable,for an employee to be able to offer a wide range of experience having worked for different companies.As long as it is planned carefully.I think that change is good and will ultimately benefit the employee and the employer.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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269 words

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