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Some people think that school children need to learn practical skills such as car maintenance or bank account management along with the academic subjects at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is true that children do not learn many practical
skills
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 at school.
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, I completely disagree with the idea that
schools
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 should teach
skills
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 like
bank
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account
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 management and car maintenance. At present, most
schools
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 focus on important academic
subjects
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such
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 as mathematics, science and language. These
subjects
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 help young people to gain knowledge and
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develop thinking
skills
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 that will be vital for their future careers. We live in a
knowledge based
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 economy where independent thinking and problem-solving are the most important
skills
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. With timetables already full,
schools
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 do not have time to teach children anything else.
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, I do not believe that most practical
skills
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 are beneficial enough to be included in lessons. I would argue that
bank
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account
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 management,
for example
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, is a life skill that anyone can learn by simply opening and using a
bank
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account
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. Most adults have no problem managing their finances without being taught accounting lessons at school. In fact, I have never met anyone who found it difficult to use a
bank
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account
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. Other practical
skills
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 like car maintenance or plumbing are not really necessary because most people prefer to pay a qualified mechanic or plumber. It would be a waste of children’s time if these
subjects
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 were introduced as part of the school curriculum. In conclusion,
schools
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 have always taught the traditional academic
subjects
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 that help students
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prepare for university or professional life. If they start to teach practical
skills
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, the study of important academic
subjects
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 will suffer.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • school
  • students
  • learn
  • life
  • skill
  • money
  • bank
  • account
  • save
  • spend
  • budget
  • plan
  • goal
  • debt
  • interest
  • tax
  • math
  • numbers
  • cost
  • safety
  • car
  • maintenance
  • repair
  • engine
  • tools
  • teach
  • practice
  • project
  • lesson
  • class
  • lesson
  • home
  • work
  • future
  • equal
  • access
  • time
  • exam
  • include
  • balance
  • decision
  • choice
  • positive
  • risk
  • safe
  • group
  • team
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