A resturant near your house is making a lot of noise. You called the manger but no action was taken. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: *Introduce yourself *Describe the problems you are facing because of this *suggest solutions

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing
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letter to express the inconvenience caused
due to
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the loud music from your restaurant. Regarding
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, I already made a telephone complaint to you
but
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,
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till
now
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now,
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no action has been taken. My name is John
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I am residing in the West Hill community
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, which
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is just 200 meters away from the location of your hotel. Since the opening of your cafe, a lot of disturbance has been faced by many people staying in that vicinity
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the deafening music
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,
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in the late evenings. Because of
this
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, I am not able to sleep during nights properly and experience severe headaches. If the issue persists like
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, citizens may face many health disorders
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deprivation of sleep.
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, I would like to suggest
, please
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that, please
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make sure that the walls are soundproof so that
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it does not allow noise to reach
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.
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, it would be appreciated if you could close the restaurant by 10
pm
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pm,
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as it is near the residential community. I eagerly await your prompt and immediate action on
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matter. Yours faithfully, P.Jothsna

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Make sure to clearly state your main points in each paragraph.
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Add more details about how the noise affects your daily life.
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Consider using simpler sentences for better understanding.
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You provided a clear problem and suggested solutions.
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Your closing is polite and expresses your expectation well.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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