You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-years-old child. write a letter to the parents.In your letter . explain why you would like the job . give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ . say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

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I am writing to you regarding the advertisement in the Australian magazine.Let me explain more in detail. I decided to take a new job in my free time.I had been working as baby sitter from 2019 until 2021 because I really enjoy with them.

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, I used to study baby care so I think

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job is very suitable for me.

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, improving culture and keeping their bodies with exercise or healthy food is completely amazing for me.

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, if I want

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about my free time I should say I am used to studying

roughly

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four

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hours

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houres

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and

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I am playing Football every day.

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, I was working in a hospital until 1 month ago but today I have

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some

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some

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free time so to

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illustrate

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illustrate

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point

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if you accept my request not only care

your

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children, but

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I can teach

him

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them

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culture

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culture

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, you can confident

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in me

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so I have knowledge and

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experience

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experience

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person to employ. Looking forward to receiving your reply. Yours faithfully, Saeed thorough.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

Dear + name
Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

176 words

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The Greeting

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job.

In some countries, there has been an increase in the number of parents, who are choosing to educate children themselves at home instead of sending them to school. Do the advantages of home education outweigh the disadvantages?

A university education should be free for all students. To what extent do you agree?

News stories on TV and newspapers are very often accompanied by pictures. Some people say that these pictures are more effective than words. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Health services are a basic necessity. However, private companies have made them quite costly for ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweigh its disadvantages?